To walk the sands of time, to find the doorway to heaven.
Leaves me breathless.
You put your hands on this skin, and I succumb.
Unabated astral movements behind my eyes.
To know you from somewhere, is to feel you under my skin.
As my blood crashes down the sand dunes on the walls of my heart.
I left you, and found you there.
Waiting for me where the moon sinks and threatens never to return.
With honey wine still on your kiss, I will not function.
I slip into another consciousness.
Walking in a dream that quivers on god’s fingers.
Kiss me from dying, and wake me once more.
Let me disappear into your arms that comfort me like a blanket against desert cold.
And I will wash these tears away in the pools of your eyes.
That offer such sweet safety swims, to the desert floor.
I liked this. It’s beautiful.
“To walk the sands of time, to find the doorway to heaven.
Leaves me breathless.”
Although, I thought starting a poem — any poem — with a string of three cliches was risky and numbing. So I mentally denied it had happened 😀 And I started here:
“You put your hands on this skin, and I succumb.”
Man! Was I rewarded for that! Powerful images. Evocative. This one alone is the most artful and creative way I can recall ever being gripped by when reading words describing a beating heart:
“As my blood crashes down the sand dunes on the walls of my heart.”
Need I tell you, Mark, I am grateful to you for your gift to us all today?
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Thank you again, that’s very kind of you. I sometimes do struggle in starting a piece. Like you say, some phrases are very clichéd but some really do fit the thoughts. I’m glad you stuck with it though
It’s interesting to see how people read poetry. I like how you telescope in and get under the seat of them. Like checking over a used car – hehe. I tend to flow-read and lift the energy and feelings from them. I guess that is a more self-operating approach which perhaps I could change. I like how nothing gets passed you! Thank you again, and I will be certain to drop by your new posts.
Have a great week ahead.
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Oh I wanted to add. In the last two days, Mark, I’ve put up more than a dozen of my insufferable little ditties. Just in case you’re looking for some entertainment. But no obligation, of course.
This one might be the best of the lot: https://cafephilos.blog/2018/08/19/roots-in-the-sea/
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Ah, thank you…i’ll check them out. My worst trait is time keeping, and finding time to do all i want to do. Thanks for the direction….will take a look when i can 🙂
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Great poem
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Thank you, glad you liked it. Thanks for stopping by!
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It’s tone is a gentle rapture of undying love. I love every lovely bit of it!
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Why thank you, inspired by The Alchemist; like much of my life. Glad you liked it!
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Incredibly passionate language & tenderness. Really enjoyed this! 🙂
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Thank you, was a different style from my usual. (And spotted a mistake, so thank you for the comment).
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